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caughtinanetwork2012-06-27 06:26 pm
redcladidealist) wrote in caughtinanetwork2012-06-27 06:26 pm
9th Combo - [Video]
[The feed comes on with Lloyd looking off to the side, talking to someone off screen.]
-sure wish I could have turned homework in like this back home! Then even if I waited until the last minute I could still-
Oh, hey, it's on.
[Lloyd looks into the camera, looking incredibly pleased with himself.]
Professor, we did it! We got our homework done! And we're even getting it in early.
[Before the original two week deadline, in fact!Are they trying to give Raine a heart attack?
He doesn't seem to realize that this isn't locked to Raine at all, that everyone can see this.]
Here, you can read it now. I wrote the stuff in blue, and Luke did the stuff in black.
[That said, he turns the starfish around so that the view takes in a table with five pieces of paper on it.]
and no one would be confuzed. You needapo appo appostrofees to becos they show were your missing letters like in don't.
"apostrophes", I think. We're supposed to spell right too, right?
There's some other ones in here too, but I don't think it's important.
Anyway, yeah, lists are better. But like, if you can't do a list, then it's better to use them. You know, stuff like "Anise, Natalia and Tear went to buy things".
There's also this thing
;
That's like a period but not. But I don't use it unless I feel like it.
(Note off to the side next to the line about spelling -> I dont think so she just sed we were suposed to write about gramer)
I don't evan know what that is. Why do you need an extra thing for a peroid if its just a peroid?
You have to use capitel letters to becos that's for names and things. If you don't use one than you don't know if your talking about Colette's dog Carmel or about carmel candy. You also have to use them at the begining of sentances but I don't know why.
(Beside the previous note -> I don't know, she sounds pretty strict. But if you say so.)
… You know, I don't know either. Maybe it's just to let people know you're starting a sentence, but shouldn't that be obvious enough with all the periods and stuff?
But yeah, you also have to capitalize the I. "i am Luke" isn't right, but "I am Luke" is.
Apostrophes can also shorten words, so they're good to have. You can shorten up "is not" to "isn't", and would of to "would've".
Or wait, is it would of or would have? The last one sounds right, but…
(And a small note -> Guy would know, ask him.)
They both sound fine to me.
Any way that's why grammer's importent. Its also importent becos profesor Raine seys it is. Their's probabley more stuff we forgot but we only have to write five pages so that's it!
Lloyd Irving
Luke fon Fabre
(Note at the bottom -> Man I'm so glad thats over.)
(Me too.)
[OOC: Replies may come from either Luke and/or Lloyd. o/ Context for those interested.]
-sure wish I could have turned homework in like this back home! Then even if I waited until the last minute I could still-
Oh, hey, it's on.
[Lloyd looks into the camera, looking incredibly pleased with himself.]
Professor, we did it! We got our homework done! And we're even getting it in early.
[Before the original two week deadline, in fact!
He doesn't seem to realize that this isn't locked to Raine at all, that everyone can see this.]
Here, you can read it now. I wrote the stuff in blue, and Luke did the stuff in black.
[That said, he turns the starfish around so that the view takes in a table with five pieces of paper on it.]
and no one would be confuzed. You need
"apostrophes", I think. We're supposed to spell right too, right?
There's some other ones in here too, but I don't think it's important.
Anyway, yeah, lists are better. But like, if you can't do a list, then it's better to use them. You know, stuff like "Anise, Natalia and Tear went to buy things".
There's also this thing
;
That's like a period but not. But I don't use it unless I feel like it.
(Note off to the side next to the line about spelling -> I dont think so she just sed we were suposed to write about gramer)
I don't evan know what that is. Why do you need an extra thing for a peroid if its just a peroid?
You have to use capitel letters to becos that's for names and things. If you don't use one than you don't know if your talking about Colette's dog Carmel or about carmel candy. You also have to use them at the begining of sentances but I don't know why.
(Beside the previous note -> I don't know, she sounds pretty strict. But if you say so.)
… You know, I don't know either. Maybe it's just to let people know you're starting a sentence, but shouldn't that be obvious enough with all the periods and stuff?
But yeah, you also have to capitalize the I. "i am Luke" isn't right, but "I am Luke" is.
Apostrophes can also shorten words, so they're good to have. You can shorten up "is not" to "isn't", and would of to "would've".
Or wait, is it would of or would have? The last one sounds right, but…
(And a small note -> Guy would know, ask him.)
They both sound fine to me.
Any way that's why grammer's importent. Its also importent becos profesor Raine seys it is. Their's probabley more stuff we forgot but we only have to write five pages so that's it!
Lloyd Irving
Luke fon Fabre
(Note at the bottom -> Man I'm so glad thats over.)
(Me too.)
[OOC: Replies may come from either Luke and/or Lloyd. o/ Context for those interested.]
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