9th Combo - [Video]

[redcladidealist]

[The feed comes on with Lloyd looking off to the side, talking to someone off screen.]

-sure wish I could have turned homework in like this back home! Then even if I waited until the last minute I could still-

Oh, hey, it's on.

[Lloyd looks into the camera, looking incredibly pleased with himself.]

Professor, we did it! We got our homework done! And we're even getting it in early.

[Before the original two week deadline, in fact! Are they trying to give Raine a heart attack?

He doesn't seem to realize that this isn't locked to Raine at all, that everyone can see this.]

Here, you can read it now. I wrote the stuff in blue, and Luke did the stuff in black.

[That said, he turns the starfish around so that the view takes in a table with five pieces of paper on it.]





and no one would be confuzed. You need apo appo appostrofees to becos they show were your missing letters like in don't.


"apostrophes", I think. We're supposed to spell right too, right?

There's some other ones in here too, but I don't think it's important.

Anyway, yeah, lists are better. But like, if you can't do a list, then it's better to use them. You know, stuff like "Anise, Natalia and Tear went to buy things".

There's also this thing

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That's like a period but not. But I don't use it unless I feel like it.


(Note off to the side next to the line about spelling -> I dont think so she just sed we were suposed to write about gramer)


I don't evan know what that is. Why do you need an extra thing for a peroid if its just a peroid?

You have to use capitel letters to becos that's for names and things. If you don't use one than you don't know if your talking about Colette's dog Carmel or about carmel candy. You also have to use them at the begining of sentances but I don't know why.


(Beside the previous note -> I don't know, she sounds pretty strict. But if you say so.)

… You know, I don't know either. Maybe it's just to let people know you're starting a sentence, but shouldn't that be obvious enough with all the periods and stuff?

But yeah, you also have to capitalize the I. "i am Luke" isn't right, but "I am Luke" is.

Apostrophes can also shorten words, so they're good to have. You can shorten up "is not" to "isn't", and would of to "would've".

Or wait, is it would of or would have? The last one sounds right, but…

(And a small note -> Guy would know, ask him.)


They both sound fine to me.

Any way that's why grammer's importent. Its also importent becos profesor Raine seys it is. Their's probabley more stuff we forgot but we only have to write five pages so that's it!

Lloyd Irving
Luke fon Fabre

(Note at the bottom -> Man I'm so glad thats over.)

(Me too.)


[OOC: Replies may come from either Luke and/or Lloyd. o/ Context for those interested.]

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[strength_of_tomorrow]

[What is this?! He'd heard that Lloyd wasn't great with academics from Raine while they all traveled together, but this is... he feels like he needs to write a letter of apology to Raine. If only he was close enough with Lloyd that he could actually teach him.]

Not here

[redcladidealist]

[Oh, it gets better, Kratos. Just wait until you see what atrocities he commits with math. >.>]

To Luke but either can answer~

[dualpunishment]

Geeze Luke, with all that journal writing I thought you'd be better at grammar! At least you're better at it than the other kid.

[redcladidealist]

Wha-? Hey! My grammar's just fine! What're you even looking at our homework for? I sent this to Professor Raine!

[fabrecation]

Hey, shut up, Anise! I don't exactly write for everyone else, you know!

And Lloyd's right; what're you even looking at this for?!

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[coolerthansora]

[He's not sure whether they really meant to show that to everyone, but...]

You guys have homework?

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[redcladidealist]

[Okay, yeah, he hadn't meant to send this out to everyone in Vatheon, but Lloyd's more than willing to complain to someone about this cruelty. He lets out a sigh that borders on a groan.]

Yeah. My teacher's here, too, and she thinks people should study all the time.

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[fabrecation]

Yeah... I'm not even sure how that happened. I never get homework.

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[clumsyblonde]

[...She's not sure she should be surprised.

But--]

The Professor gave both of you homework? [Giving homework to Lloyd makes sense, but to Luke too?]

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[redcladidealist]

[Coleeeeette, pity him! ;-;]

She saw us writing to each other and said we were both bad at it. She didn't even care that he's not her student. She made him do it, too.

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[fabrecation]

What Lloyd said. I've never even written a paper before this.

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[lucentpalisade]

...why did the dog bite the cat?

Are they fighting?

[ Yeah. That's all she took away from that. ]

[ OOC DIes laughing. ]

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[redcladidealist]

Huh?

[Totally not prepared to defend his choice of an example.]

Uh... I don't know. I guess so? Why do you ask?

[OOC: Hee~]

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[fateabsolute]

[Alas, how tragic it is to be a refined swordsman!] You'd want to save yourselves the embarrassment and turn in your... "assignment" in private. [Some of his sympathies will even go to the poor tutor who has to deal with this.]

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[redcladidealist]

[Lloyd's shoulders hunch a little bit, and his cheeks are a little bit red. Too late on saving himself embarrassment.]

You don't have to look, you know.

1/2 [ not here ]

[grandhealer]

[ Just... what is this atrocity? Okay she's sure that she's taught you better than that Lloyd so why is this so terrible? What's worse is that she can read Lloyd's part clearly after teaching him for so many years.

... And at least Luke's part is different. ]

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[grandhealer]

[ After staring at that horrendous paper for a few moments Raine brings herself up on video ]

It seems the two of you both have a lot to learn about papers and grammar. To begin with when writing a paper you are supposed to use correct grammar which includes spelling words correctly. Also, when constructing a paper with another person do not make the paper sound as if the two of you are having a conversation. Each paragraph should flow smoothly from the last making is easy to read.

If possible, I would like this paper in person so I may grade is accordingly as well as the rest of the homework I had given you several weeks ago Lloyd. [ Nope she hasn't forgotten about that homework she gave you before this Lloyd. In fact that homework is overdue. ]

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[blessedbyfarore]

Hey, Lloyd, that's really good! [...Yeah, they've found a kindred spirit, sob.] I'm not good at writing at all.

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[redcladidealist]

[Lloyd perks up. Compliments on his homework are rare.]

You think so?

I'm not really that great, either. Writing is boring

[KINDRED SPIRIT!]

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[fabrecation]

I like writing... I just don't write for other people. [He rubs the back of his neck and glances away.] I write in my diary, that's all.

[amnesiadragon]

Your handwriting is really good!

[Says the person who has trouble just reading sometimes.]

[fabrecation]

... Huh? Really? Everyone always tells me it's bad...

[Says the one with the worst handwriting out of the two.]

[redcladidealist]

Wait, whose handwriting? The blue one or the black?

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[demonicbookworm]

<sub>[Um... what?

Okay, let's not mention anything. After all Ruca has a terrible writing, too. but he does not make any grammar/spelling mistakes]</sub>

Homework, huh...

_{[he really misses homework. AND SCHOOL ;; ]}

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[redcladidealist]

[If he misses homework that much, he could do Lloyd's! Lloyd would be okay with this!]

Yeah... My teacher wants me to keep studying even here.

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[gameplays]

...Who ever gets their homework done early?

[Besides Kagami, that is.]

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[redcladidealist]

Well, not me, usually, but Luke was working on it with me, so it was a little easier, and he wanted to make sure we got it in on time. This was his first paper.